Can you please edit this ?

Aquene stared at the red coals, there was only a dull red glow left to them. It was very early morning not even the sun was up. “How can we not fight?” Altsoba, her brother, said indignantly. “They are stealing are land!” His eyebrows furrowed with anger.


“Do we really need war? Can’t we just live in peace? There is much land, that all of us can share.” Aquene said. She tightened the blanket around her shoulders.


Altsoba had been there for Cornstalks speech, There is only one answer for our people, to rise up and drive the white men from our forest. We must return to the old way and to do that the white man must die. He had come home excited, fired up to fight. However when he relayed the story to his sister; she agreed with Old Tassel. Old Tassel had said, If we cut the skin of the white man, it is the Indian people who will bleed.


“Must the white man really die?” Aquene countered.











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Can you please edit this ?
It wouldn't be "your" homework then, now would it?








Don't parents help their kids with homework anymore?
Reply:Aquene stared at the coals, only a dull red glow still left to the dying embers. It was very early morning, the sun had yet to rise. “How can we not fight?”, Altsoba, her brother, said indignantly. “They are stealing our land!” His eyebrows furrowed with anger.


“Do we really need war? Can’t we just live in peace? There is much land, that all of us can share”, Aquene said. She tightened the blanket around her shoulders.





Altsoba had been there for Cornstalk's speech. "There is only one answer for our people," he recalled Cornstalk saying, "to rise up and drive the white men from our forest. We must return to the old way and to do that the white man must die."





He had come home excited, fired up to fight. However, when he relayed the story to his sister she had instead agreed with Old Tassel. Old Tassel had said, "If we cut the skin of the white man, it is the Indian people who will bleed."





“Must the white man really die?” countered Aquene.








Additional: I don't know who gave me the thumbs down. In the writing industry, people will submit their work which will then get looked over and edited. I figured since you wrote it, then I'm not really doing your homework for you by edting it.
Reply:do your own homework and stop trying to have it done for you... cheating is a bad idea...

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